The first chapter of a novel is so important – it’s the first thing a reader, editor or agent sees, and if they don’t like it they won’t read on. And these days with Amazon offering the Look Inside feature, potential readers can read the start of your book from the comfort of their armchair. Get it wrong and it’s all they’ll ever read. Get it right and you’ll make a sale.
One of my novels has had so many first chapters it’s amazing it knows its own identity. For your amusement, here’s its history, to date. What I needed to happen in the first chapter was for amateur genealogist Katie to visit a house where her ancestors used to live, get a look inside, and have the current owners hint to her at mysteries in its past. In chapter 2 the historical part of the story begins; from then on the chapters alternate between current day and historical.
Katie arrives at the house, knocks on the door, chats to the owners and they show her round and hint at mysteries in the house’s past.
I read this version out to my writing group, and the feedback was that it was all too easy for her, there was no conflict. So…
Katie arrives at the house, knocks on the door but there’s no answer. She sneaks round the back to peer in windows, gets caught in the act by the current owners who threaten to call the police etc. She explains why she’s there, then they get interested, show her round inside and hint at mysteries in the house’s past.
I sent this version to a literary critique agency. The feedback was that it was all very well, but a central theme of the novel was conflict between Katie and her husband (who doesn’t get why she’s so fascinated by the past) and that I should show that conflict in chapter one.
Also, this version was discussed in depth by a group of fellow writers at a novelists’ conference, and they came up with the marvellous suggestion of taking the start of chapter 2 (which is the first historical chapter) and turning it into a prologue to give the novel a proper hook.
New prologue – a couple of pages in the form of a letter, providing a definite hook and hinting at a mystery connected with the house.
Chapter One begins with a new opening scene where Katie reminds her husband she’s off to look at the old house, and he needs to look after the kids. They have a row, and their conflicting views are shown. Katie storms out and goes to the house, then it continues as version 2.
I sent this version to an agent with whom I had a one-to-one at the Winchester writers’ conference last year. He liked the novel and wanted to see the whole thing, but asked me to change the first chapter. ‘Don’t start with a domestic,’ he said. ‘I get enough of that at home.’ So….
I rewrote the beginning, so that after the prologue it starts with Katie in the car on the way to the house, musing on the row she’d had with her husband and wondering if he’ll ever understand her obsession. She arrives at the house, then it continues as version 2.
Sadly the agent didn’t take me on. I then submitted this version to publisher Carina UK, and they’ve offered me a two-book deal! Which I am very, very excited about! But it is highly likely my editor (oh, how I enjoy saying my editor!) will want some changes, so…
You’ll have to wait until it’s published, and buy the book to find out!
But it all goes to show – often you’ll work harder on the beginning of a novel than on any other part. It can be the most difficult bit to get right. Remember, you don’t have to get it right first time. The point of the first draft of the first chapter is to get you up and running, into the story. Just write, even if you know it’s not a good opening, and keep writing. When you’ve reached the end, you can come back and rework that beginning, as many times as you need to, until you’ve got something which grabs readers and doesn’t let them go.
Captain Black said:
Not so much rewriting the first chapter as re-plotting the book’s beginning, eh? There’s a good lesson to take away from such exercises, isn’t there? In any case, it’s good not to get stuck in a rigidly prescribed plot, in my experience.
I fully agree with the importance of the first chapter (or prologue) and the reasons you give. However, having heard this advice from many writers and agents, I often worry that writers might over-focus on this aspect, at the expense of the rest of the book. Personally, I’d leave this particular kind of editing until near the end of the preparation phase of the project. At the very least, until all chapters are written and edited.
Of course, that’s just my method and what (hopefully) works for me. Each author should find a process that suits them. But don’t be afraid to experiment; it’s fun!
Absolutely! I’d written almost the whole book when I rewrote the first chapter, versions 2 and 3. I’d written and edited the entire book when I wrote version 4.
You definitely need to keep the momentum going, so the initial first chapter can be anything you like, as long as it gets you into the story.
Exciting stuff. Now I don’t feel so bad as I’ve re-written my first two chapters about six times so far, and may do again….
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Author Kath McGurl on the hard work and eventual rewards of reflecting, revising and rewriting
Another book about a genealogist! 🙂
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