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On writing a first chapter

19 Thursday Jun 2014

Posted by kathmcgurl in Writing

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book deal, Carina, novel, Writing

The first chapter of a novel is so important – it’s the first thing a reader, editor or agent sees, and if they don’t like it they won’t read on. And these days with Amazon offering the Look Inside feature, potential readers can read the start of your book from the comfort of their armchair. Get it wrong and it’s all they’ll ever read. Get it right and you’ll make a sale.

One of my novels has had so many first chapters it’s amazing it knows its own identity. For your amusement, here’s its history, to date. What I needed to happen in the first chapter was for amateur genealogist Katie to visit a house where her ancestors used to live, get a look inside, and have the current owners hint to her at mysteries in its past. In chapter 2 the historical part of the story begins; from then on the chapters alternate between current day and historical.

First version

Katie arrives at the house, knocks on the door, chats to the owners and they show her round and hint at mysteries in the house’s past.

I read this version out to my writing group, and the feedback was that it was all too easy for her, there was no conflict. So…

Second version

Katie arrives at the house, knocks on the door but there’s no answer. She sneaks round the back to peer in windows, gets caught in the act by the current owners who threaten to call the police etc. She explains why she’s there, then they get interested, show her round inside and hint at mysteries in the house’s past.

I sent this version to a literary critique agency. The feedback was that it was all very well, but a central theme of the novel was conflict between Katie and her husband (who doesn’t get why she’s so fascinated by the past) and that I should show that conflict in chapter one.

Also, this version was discussed in depth by a group of fellow writers at a novelists’ conference, and they came up with the marvellous suggestion of taking the start of chapter 2 (which is the first historical chapter) and turning it into a prologue to give the novel a proper hook.

So…

Third version

New prologue – a couple of pages in the form of a letter, providing a definite hook and hinting at a mystery connected with the house.

Chapter One begins with a new opening scene where Katie reminds her husband she’s off to look at the old house, and he needs to look after the kids. They have a row, and their conflicting views are shown. Katie storms out and goes to the house, then it continues as version 2.

I sent this version to an agent with whom I had a one-to-one at the Winchester writers’ conference last year. He liked the novel and wanted to see the whole thing, but asked me to change the first chapter. ‘Don’t start with a domestic,’ he said. ‘I get enough of that at home.’ So….

Fourth version

I rewrote the beginning, so that after the prologue it starts with Katie in the car on the way to the house, musing on the row she’d had with her husband and wondering if he’ll ever understand her obsession. She arrives at the house, then it continues as version 2.

Sadly the agent didn’t take me on. I then submitted this version to publisher Carina UK, and they’ve offered me a two-book deal! Which I am very, very excited about! But it is highly likely my editor (oh, how I enjoy saying my editor!) will want some changes, so…

Fifth version

You’ll have to wait until it’s published, and buy the book to find out!

 

But it all goes to show – often you’ll work harder on the beginning of a novel than on any other part. It can be the most difficult bit to get right. Remember, you don’t have to get it right first time. The point of the first draft of the first chapter is to get you up and running, into the story. Just write, even if you know it’s not a good opening, and keep writing. When you’ve reached the end, you can come back and rework that beginning, as many times as you need to, until you’ve got something which grabs readers and doesn’t let them go.

 

 

 

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The genesis of my novella

09 Friday May 2014

Posted by kathmcgurl in Books, Writing

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I didn’t set out to write a Regency romance novella. Not at all. I set out, way back in 2010, to write a full length novel. This was to be my practice novel, my prove-I-can-stick-at-it novel, my must-reach-the-end novel. I just wanted to write 80,000 words or more, then edit them into some sort of shape. I’d tried and failed at a couple of novels years back, and this time, wanted to show myself I could do it if I really tried.

I’d been researching my family tree, and had come across some characters who fascinated me. When I could no longer find out any more about them I decided to fill in the blanks via fiction. This, I thought, could become a novel. I knew even as I wrote it that it was possibly only of interest to me and my immediate family, but I wasn’t trying to write a commercial novel – I was just trying to complete something of novel length. Didn’t matter what.

So I wrote it, edited it, got some professional feedback on it (which said nice things like I was good at dialogue, my characters were well formed and developed well, I had some nice description which made the settings come alive; and also said what I already knew – that the novel was not commercial as it stood and would need a complete restructuring if I wanted to do anything more with it), and then I put the novel away. Its job was done – I’d written and edited 80,000 words. Gave myself a pat on the back for that.

So with that novel under my belt I went ahead and wrote another, this one 93,000 words, knowing I was capable of it, and having learned a lot about how to structure long fiction, and how I personally like to write. This one ended up far more commercial, and one agent nearly took it on last year. Nearly, but sadly not quite near enough. 😦 Anyway, onwards ever onwards – I’m now mid-way through a third.

But, those characters from my first novel kept nagging me. There was a large section in the middle which was basically a love triangle. What if, I thought, I chopped off the irrelevant beginning and the boring end, cut out superfluous characters and unnecessary plot strands, and strengthened what was left? Would that make a book in its own right?

It was a wonderful lesson in major editing. I hacked and chopped and pruned, then added a new first chapter and tidied the end, then rewrote the entire thing. It was great fun to do. I ended up with 50,000 words and a story which hung together nicely. And is STILL based on my family history research, although I changed the surnames of the main characters.

My lovely son created a cover for it, and I published it a couple of weeks ago, as Mr Cavell’s Diamond. Those who’ve read it seem to like it, judging by the reviews. So that makes it all worth while.

And the lesson is – never, ever throw anything away. Nothing you write need ever be wasted. You never know when you might come up with the perfect way to use some of your early scribblings!

 

 

Busy busy busy

23 Sunday Mar 2014

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So sorry that it’s been over a month since I updated this blog. I would say I’ve had no time, but if you’ve read my post Time To Write you’ll know that really means I’ve not been motivated enough to blog. Which sounds terrible put like that, doesn’t it? *blushes*

I have, however, been hard at work on several writing projects. Back in January I blogged about having too many projects, and I couldn’t decide which to get on with. I ended up working on three of them. Here’s an update:

1. Print versions of my How To books. This project is now complete, and very soon the print books will be available to buy from Amazon and other online outlets. Watch this space – I’ll let you know when they’re up! I’ve extended both books, uploaded a new ebook version (already available) and spent far longer than I expected getting the formatting right. I’ll do a post soon on Lessons Learned.

2. Regency romance novella based on part of my first novel. I had lots of fun with this. I extracted the middle 50,000 words from my novel, reshaped, removed a few characters, rewrote large sections. It’s far from finished but it reached the stage where a second opinion would be worthwhile, and two lovely writer-friends offered to read it for me. It’s now out with them.

3. With the print project complete and the novella project on hold awaiting feedback, that’s left me with my main WIP. I’ve been adding to it slowly this year, and I’m now about half way through the story. It’s coming up a bit short on word count – I’m hoping it’ll end up at 90,000 but at the moment is heading towards around 80,000 – but I won’t worry about that until I have the first draft written. I’m back ‘full time’ on that project now, and have spent this weekend writing a critical mid-novel scene.

Him indoors is still often asking how I’m getting on with my psychological thriller, the one he really wants to read. So I guess I’d better do that one next!

I’d always thought I was a one-project woman. With limited writing time I need to crack on and make the most of it. But actually I have found recently that I get more done if there’s more than one project on the go, at different stages. If I’m not feeling creative I can turn to the editing or formatting project and get on with that. If I’m cross-eyed from proof-reading it’s a refreshing change to do some first-drafting, where it doesn’t matter how you spell or punctuate, as long as you get the words written.

So when I get the feedback on the regency romance, I can use that one as the editing project if I’m not feeling first-drafty. It’s a good mix, and I think I’ll try to always have more than one novel on the go now.

Do you like to work on one thing at a time, or do you have many things on the go at once?

 

Time to write

08 Saturday Feb 2014

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I’ve been meaning to write this blog post for a couple of weeks now, but have struggled to find the time to write it. I have a full and busy life and sometimes simply don’t have time to do all the things I really want to do, like progressing my writing projects or updating this blog.

Hmm. Let’s have a look at what those phrases really mean: ‘struggled to find the time’ and ‘don’t have time’.

We all, as my husband is fond of saying, have the same amount of time available to us. That is, 24 hours a day, 7 days a week. No one can ‘find time’ – there’s no more or less of it each day than there was the day before. What we can do is organise our time, and choose what to do with it. Sure there are often time commitments – to a day job, to children, spouses, elderly parents – things we need to fit into each day. But except in rare cases and hopefully only for the short term, these commitments don’t use up the full 24 hours each day.

And saying you don’t have time to do something is really saying you don’t have enough motivation to do it. As an extreme example, suppose someone told you that starting tomorrow you need to drive for an hour and a half, sit in a quiet room for an hour, and then drive an hour and a half home. Every day. That’s four hours, every day. You’d snort and laugh, and say, well I simply don’t have time to do that! Now imagine that you have kidney failure. You need to undergo dialysis for an hour every day, and the nearest facility is an hour and a half’s drive away. Now could you spare the time to do this? Well yes, of course you could, because it’s either do it or die. You have the motivation to do it now, so you’d damn well spare the time to do it, and fit all your other commitments around the daily dialysis trips.

If you are motivated enough to do a thing, you will always find there is enough time to do it.

Ten years ago, before I began writing, I was waiting until I ‘had the time’ to write. With a full time job, a house to run and two children to rear (small then, hulking great teenagers now), I felt there was no time for me to write. Until one day a story appeared fully formed in my mind, and I sat down at the computer after my working day was complete, and began to write. An hour and a half later the story was written. There’d been time for me to write, and my company was still in business, the house was still standing and the children alive. From then on, I felt strongly motivated to write and therefore I scheduled writing time into my life.

My company is still in business, the house is still standing (I assume, actually we’ve moved since then!) and the children are still alive. And I’ve written hundreds of short stories, had dozens of them published, written two How To books, two completed novels, another novel part written, and kept the womagwriter blog up to date. Since then I’ve also increased my working hours, taken up running and when my mother began needing more support, I’ve provided it.

All out of the same 24 hours a day, 7 days a week that we all are allocated.

I don’t think I’m superwoman. I know other writers who’ve written novels while on maternity leave, written and promoted novels while bringing up toddlers and holding down a full time job, written and sold novellas at the rate of one a month. But I can do all this because I want to. I really want to. I love writing, want to produce a novel good enough to land me an agent and a traditional book deal, want to write and self-publish other books, want to build up my running so I can complete the Bournemouth half-marathon in a respectable time, and want to complete my projects at work on time and to budget. I’m motivated to do all these things.

Not always. Sometimes I say I don’t have time, and what that really means is, I can’t be bothered. So I veg in front of the TV, play a mindless game on my iPad, or laze in a hot bath with a good book for an hour or so. It’s ok to give yourself permission to take time out now and again. But overall, try to stay motivated so that you make the best use of your time.

Decide what you really want. Each day when you get up, work out when in the day you are going to go after your dream. Schedule that time in first, and make everything else fit around it.

The difficult middle bit

10 Tuesday Dec 2013

Posted by kathmcgurl in Writing

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I think all novelists know what I mean. You’ve written the first 20-30k words, all the exciting set-up is done. You’re into the middle of the book, where you need to develop your plot lines and build up to the climaxes you have in mind for around the 60k mark. You can’t wait till you are writing that last third of the book. But first you have to write the middle third.

Any tips for getting through this, other than teeth-gritting and application of bum to writing seat?

Goals

08 Sunday Dec 2013

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I’ve found I work best to self-imposed goals. They have to be attainable, but they also have to require some effort to achieve.

I didn’t take part in Nanowrimo – I know there is no way my other time commitments could allow me to write 50,000 words in a month. But I did privately try for a half-nano. I aimed to get my work-in-progress up to 25,000 by the end of November. I had started it at the end of October and wanted to get it well underway quickly.

I didn’t quite manage it – November ended with my word count around 23,000 but that’s not bad. I’m now trying to get to around 30,000 by Christmas. That’s a third of a novel, in 2 months. Which should mean I can complete it by end April. No, let’s say end May, as I have a couple of week’s holiday at Easter in which I won’t get any writing done.

Then I’ll allow myself until the end of September to edit and polish the novel. Come October, a year after beginning it, it should be ready for submission to agents. This timescale, if I achieve it, will be substantially quicker than the last novel which took about 16 months to get to the submission-ready stage.

In October, I’m also planning on running the Bournemouth half-marathon. Eek! Much training required, as well as much writing!

It’ll soon be New Year, and as always I will set myself a series of writing and fitness resolutions. And I’ll publish them here. If you make resolutions, do tell people about them. That way, you’ll be constantly asked how you’re getting on with them, and it helps motivate you to continue. Well, it works for me.

Do goals and deadlines work for you? Do you have any tips for setting them? Now’s a good time to think about this, so in January you can set yourself some brilliant goals and make 2014 the year it happens for you!

The perfect running route

23 Saturday Nov 2013

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Tomorrow’s Sunday, and in the morning I will go for my weekly run. Dodgy knees allowing, I’ll probably do my favourite 12.5km (8 mile) run.

I start from home, turn left down the road and onto the cliff-top. I then head eastwards towards Hengistbury Head, staying on the cliff-top path until it runs out, then a little bit of road-running before I cut across the open land on a sandy path, then a board walk, and then towards Hengistbury Head itself (see photo). 

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The path then joins one of the main tarmac routes over the Head. I loop round through the woods, round the back of a golf course, and return home via the prom.

Last week while running this route I was thinking that this run has all the elements of a well-written novel.

During this route I run on all sorts of surfaces: tarmac, firm mud path, gravel track, sand, boardwalk. Each surface gives a different feel to the running – rather like a good novelist employs varied pace at different points in the narrative.

There’s a lot of different and wonderful scenery, from the broad expansive seascapes to the closed in woodland. I run past a field which sometimes houses rare breeds cattle, past a golf course, past some residential houses. On the way out I’m looking towards the Isle of Wight and on the way back, Purbeck. It’s never a boring run – there is always something different to look at. Just as great novels need different settings to keep a reader’s interest.

If you look at the photo you can probably see a tarmac path going up the hill. I start off going up that, then turn off to the left on a mud path which is less well trodden. With some novels you think you know where it’s going and what will happen, and then it veers off in a new, unexpected and much more interesting direction.

This path leads into some dark, tangled woodland. At almost half way I pass a point where once I came across police investigating a body that had been found in the woods (tragically, a suicide). Throwing in some surprise and intrigue at the half way point does no novel any harm.

Then the path leads me out of the woods and onto the high ground covered with heather and gorse at the end of the headland. The path keeps leading forward but you can see there’s soon no more land, nowhere to go, and it must turn back. Novels, too, reach a point where the narrative needs to begin to resolve itself.

My run comes down some steps to sea level, and takes a sharp left on a tarmac path through woods. There are always a lot of people here, walking dogs, cycling, pushing prams. And the occasional land train comes motoring along. I cut off this main path back onto a mud track through woods where I’m usually once more alone. Novels sometimes lull you into a false sense of security by putting the main character in a safe place, surrounded by other people, before once more sending them off on their own again.

Then it’s past the half-built visitors’ centre, past the outdoor pursuits centre and along a gravel track behind a golf course. High hedges mean you can’t see much other than your next few steps and there is only one direction to go in. The novel rushes on, the narrative moving relentlessly forward, towards a conclusion which is now inevitable.

Finally I come out in the open, back to the prom and home. It’s a longish stretch on the prom – I can see the end of the run from a way out, and enjoy the view across Purbeck and the feeling of a good run finished. This is a novel with a leisurely, drawn out ending where we see the characters settling down into their post-novel lives, all loose ends tied, all sub-plots nicely completed. I end up back where I started, but with a different view (westwards rather than eastwards) and with tired, satisfied legs.

I’m not sure whether this post has worked – it all sounded more sensible in my head while I was running, than it did just now trying to write it up. Ah well. If you’ve followed my womagwriter blog for a while you’ll know I’ve a habit of coming up with tortured analogies such as when I likened writing to the Tour de France.

(Incidently if you’re a Mapometer user here’s my route. I think you may need a Mapometer account (free) to be able to click this link. It’s a great tool for mapping routes, working out distances and saving or sharing them for future use.)

A storm is coming

27 Sunday Oct 2013

Posted by kathmcgurl in Blogging, Running, Writing

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There’s a storm warning in place for the south of England – overnight tonight we will be battered by 80mph winds and lashed by rain, several inches are due to fall. We’re on amber alert. The wind has already picked up, but it was fine this morning so I went out for a run.

And what a run it was! One of my most exhilarating ever. I ran 4km along the Bournemouth cliff top, westwards against the wind. This was very hard work. Then turned around at the pier, and ran 4km eastwards with the wind at my back, along the prom. This part felt like flying!

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The wind was whipping up the sea into a frenzy, and also creating sandstorms along the beach. My back got sand-blasted. After the run I came back down to the beach to try to capture the drama but with only a phone camera it’s hard to do it justice.

I experienced a real runner’s high on the last few km. It was incredible.

And now this afternoon I’m aiming for a writer’s high. You know that feeling, when it’s all going so well, the story is playing out like a film script in your head and all you need do is take dictation from your characters? I’m hoping that will happen today. I was stuck on a scene but in the middle of the night realised that the answer is to write it in a different character’s viewpoint. I’m looking forward to getting inside her head.

 

The Next Novel

14 Monday Oct 2013

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Now that Short Stories and How to Write Them has been pushed out into the big wide world of Amazon to sink or swim, it’s time for me to get going with another writing project. Over the last few weeks I’ve been jotting notes, compiling character sheets and adding to a novel-planning spreadsheet, but now I need to start actually writing.

Starting writing a novel requires the ability to overcome an enormous amount of inertia. Like getting a massive snowball rolling – you need a huge push. Or like getting off the sofa and going for a run – the hardest part is hauling yourself up and lacing up your running shoes. Once that’s done and you’re out the door, it all becomes a lot easier.

A novel needs an opening sentence. And while it’s true that whatever you write in a first draft can and probably will be changed as the novel takes shape, I’ve discovered I need to find a reasonably good first sentence, in the right voice and tone, to get me going. Otherwise I’ll stare at a blank page for hours (actually that’s not true. I’ll faff on facebook for hours, hoping that opening will come to me.)

I’ve made a start tonight. I’m not sure I have found the right first sentence though. There’s every chance I’ll bin this opening and start again tomorrow evening. But for now it’ll do, and it’s got me into the first scene. I’m up and running.

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Short Stories and How to Write Them

12 Saturday Oct 2013

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Short Stories and How to Write Them

I’m delighted to announce publication of my second book, Short Stories and How to Write Them. Now available from Amazon as a Kindle ebook.

It’s part anthology and part How To, containing 14 of my stories plus discussion on various aspects of short story writing, including dialogue, story structure, characterisation, making time to write and many more topics.

Click on the image for a link to the book at Amazon.co.uk.

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